Your typical story about a girl from our world pulled into the Pokémon world . . . or is it?

Hillaree, known by her friends as the "Mewtwo Queen," is suddenly taken to a world where Pokémon are real. She is told she will be returned home when she is ready. What could that mean? Well, since she's going to be there a while, she might as well catch some Pokémon!

A Pokémon Fan Comic written and drawn by Vye Brante. Coloring jobs beginning with Chapter 5 done by xxHANIxx. The art gets better as you go, trust me.

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Ch. 2 Page 27

18 Feb 2007 03:45 pm

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Author's Comments:

Vye Brante, 18 Feb 2007 03:45 am

Plot Points! There are several plot points on this page. I can't tell you what they are, of course. Don't wanna give stuff away . . . Just take notes. Or something.

Every once in a while, I'll draw something and then look at it and think, "Who the heck drew this?! It wasn't me! It's too good!" The Charmander in the second panel is one of these such pictures. So. Freakin'. Cute. I hope I didn't mess it up when I penned it or put in the grayscale.

For future reference, that black border means it's a flashback. Yup. This is showing when Pr. Evur found the Charmander, (duh.) The story starts in March, so he found him late September, hence the coat. The drawing of the flashback is okay, but Pr. Evur's legs are a bit too short and I was too lazy to do anything real creative with his shoes. So it is what it is.

Off the topic of the page, I was wondering about the pace of the story. At first I was afraid it was going too slow but now I'm wondering if it's going too fast. What do you guys think? Is it too fast, too slow, or just right? I'd appreciate your input on this.

Edit Note: I accidentally mixed up the months mentioned above. The story starts in March so he found the Charmander in September. It used to say the story started in September so he found him in March. I fixed it, but I just wanted to clear it up for anyone who read it when it was wrong.

User's Comments:

Hanzinator, 28 Dec 2007 03:06 pm

1. Evur looks like he's wearing sweatpants.
2. Am I being a critic? If so, good.

Vye Brante, 28 Dec 2007 03:31 pm

Sure. That's okay. He's supposed to be dressed warmly.

And sure, go ahead, be a critic. Just don't be mean . . .